Sloppy writing detracts from the story. That's a given. I have a real problem with four little words. Just. Had. That. Get.
"Just" and "that" are essentially useless. If you read back through the story, most times these two words can simply be deleted.
"Had" will sometimes add to the story. But seldom. This is another word which is a red flag for me.
When I self-edit, these are the things I've noticed more and more.
I try to tighten up my story piece by piece.
"Get" is a real pain in the rear.
"I don't get you!" Use instead: "I don't understand you!"
"Get your rear in gear" Use "Put your rear in gear."
"I need to get some groceries" Use "I need to buy some groceries."
The word "get" simply irritates me. It's lazy and sloppy. You can use so many other words instead. But when I'm in a hurry, and writing the first draft, "get" is my bud. Second read yields me banging my head on the keyboard in frustration and using my handy dandy dictionary and thesaurus.
Another problem...ADVERBS. *insert "Psycho" shower theme music*
"I don't care," he said slowly. ARGH! How's about--"I don't care," he drawled.
"No!" she said angrily. ----- "No!" she spat.
I'm bad about this one, too. I want so badly to convey mood and emotion in conversation, but there are better ways.
I'm going to do an exercise this weekend and list some conversation indicators. *snickering* I love when I make up terms.
Instead of ADVERB world, I will list verbs which retain the smooth flow of conversation. I will post these above my computer. And I will use them.
"I had to just type that, didn't I?" I suddenly grinned.
I have my work cut out for me. :)~~
Excerpt from Miss Goody Two-Shoes
1 week ago